The photos look good but a 'talk to camera' might be a better format to explain the issues that you encountered during your production. You could talk about how the lighting affected your focusing and also why you filmed again - to many shots of people backs and how you felt it necessary to include the key prop - 'the message' sent'.
You are all on target but you could add some extra blog material to enhance your understanding of the production process.
please can you add
a 'talk to camera'
record your editing skills (grey quicktime, file, record)
Please can you attend workshop on Monday so I can view your rushes with you.